As I was skimming through the list of very detailed blogs, two of them caught of my eye. The first one was Isablel Arriaga's. It was about Romeo and Juliet and she was questioning if they really love eachother. That was quite a shock to me so I kept reading. At first I didn't believe it but she provided me with several bits of text evidence. Some were directly from the book and some were paraphrased. For example, she uses details from act 1 and act 2 in the first paragraph where Romeo is talking all about Juliet's beauty. She incorporated the lines from the text corrrectly and included a lot of it. The second things that I liked was her deep thoughts. She included deep thoughts that she elaborated on, based on her quotations. I like how she connected her thoughts to the real world to explain what she meant. She also ended with a question to leave the reader thinking. This was a very powerful and well thought out response.
The second blog that I thought was very well written was Michelle Wong's. Her response was a poem and description on her book, Luna. I have never read the book before so it was new to me. One of the first things that I noticed and liked was something in her poem: the figurative and descriptive language. I felt connected to Liam and started to understand and feel the way he did based on her descriptions. She compared being trapped to other things to, using metaphors and similies. In addition, I noticed and liked something about the format. She put important words in bold. This made me think that in the book, these words came up a lot and were important to the character so it made me think and reread the sentence. Overall, this response was very well crafted.
I enjoyed reading both of these responses becuase they were both interesting and well thought out. These blogs made me think about my own blogs. What can I do to improve mine? Well, the first thing that I want to do is include more text evidence. I feel that I always paraphrase the text instead of including direct quotations. I should start including direct quotes because it is helpful yet also good practice on how to include quotes correctly. The second thing that I want to do which I noticed in both responses is be more personal. Instead of being so general, connect it to life and maybe to me so then I can elaborate more and have more meaning and description to my writing. These wonderful responses written by Michelle and Isable were very good to read and they helped me realize things about my blogs.
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